There were still a few parts that I think they were mischaracterized (like Peter webbing those douchebags at the store for making fun of Wade. Peter keeps a REALLY tight lid on his Secret ID), but on the whole the fic more than makes up for it.
It was a great transition, seeing them get the help they very so needed.
Johnny seemed a little inconsistent, he seemed pretty okay with their relationship in the last fic but not in this one? I get why, at some points, but the first part felt like it came a little out of nowhere.
Kudos to Harry and the Matt mention. I hope we actually get some Matt in the next one! I love the team red dynamic!
You've done well again! I hope I don't come off as trying to criticize ya. Merely trying to point out things that confused me mostly.
Here's to the next one!
(PS I love love love kitten Florence! So damn cute!)
I know! I was mad at myself for writing it even while I was writing it, but I wanted him to react in some way, and it just turned out that way, so I kept it.
Yes! Matt is in the next one, though not nearly as much as I had hoped, so he'll definitely be in the fourth one a lot more.
Oh, absolutely not! I welcome criticism, as long as it's constructive, and yours certainly is, :) I greatly appreciate the effort you've put into your comments. Thank you much!
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